Michael Douglas Milne
could I have your opinion about my first animation?
Please feel free to tell me how I can improve it or what you think in general. Thanks for your time,
0:13 Thought bubble with no content. Is the student's brain empty?
0:17 Arrow coincides with voiceover "After that..." This is fine, but inconsistent
with other segues in the piece (i.e., segues at 0:43-0:5 0) Consider
eliminating the arrow.
0:38 The illustrations did not match voiceover content
1:00 Teacher as armed policeman? Image doesn't match voiceover.
1:18 Used eraser animation instead of draw animation used elsewhere in video.
1:25 Arbitrary and noticeable mix of cartoon styles. Also poor screen arrangement
with large white space and one illustration cut off at upper-left.
There is a risk to using stock illustrations: the more you try to combine, the harder it becomes to match their style. This is evident in your video.
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